Hello, everyone,
Before I begin to presentate let me ask some questions for you.
Who is doing twitter or metoday, then how many are you doing blog, how about cyworld?
Ok, how do you feel when you doing tweeting with your follower?
The title of my review article is The social network affects someone as falling in love.
I will explain the experiemnt reserarch remarked in the articale and then give you my opinion about that .
The keyword is oxytosin. Oxytosin is the hormon in our body. The oxytosin is related our emotion of symphaty generousity and familarity. When we feel symphthy the 농도 of oxytosin is incresed in our body. And When we hus, the oxytosin is also increased. In reverse when we inhale of injected oxytosin oin our obody , our generousity and our sympathy is increased.
D.r Zak who is the neroeconomist did the expeirment with the person whos is doing twitter, and he measured the oxytosin before and after his tweeting communication. Suprisingly the 농도 of oxytosin in increased. it does means that we feel like as same as a real relationship real relation.
What is this result can we interprete.
I will give you good tihng and badthing of these result.
At first, the social network in online makes us less streessful and give more luburicant life. The soecial relationship is lessen the stresss and make our life lubricant. The social media in online can do that jpb.
The bad thing is that we should balanced the online and offline social life. The online cannot replace our real life, real social relationship. But the brain think it is real. The online social relation is more easy becuase you never confromt the face what you communicate. But the online relationhship is very narrow and can be easily dislinked. Therefore the real reltaion ship is much important than online of it.
If we balance with online and offline realtionship the social network meida will help us doing happy life, more sympaphy more full of love in the world.
Enjoy your social network with it.
Thenk you.
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보완점
1. article title: Social networking affects brains like falling in love.
2. Contents 도입 부분이 어색한데 어떻게 말을 열어야 할 지 모르겠다
3. sympathy 대신 empathy
4. Oxytosin 역학 좀 더 clear 하게: human stimulant of empathy, generosity, trust, and more. social glue adheres families, communities, and societies.
5. oxytosin의 역할과 twitter의 결과를 얘기했지만 사회성에 대한 언급이 없음으로써 내용 연결이 매끄럽지 않음. 일반적인 사회관계를 가질 때도 oxytosin이 나온다는 걸 강조해야 함.
6. 키워드 추가: physical engagement with people we trust and enjoy
7. People with many friends live longer and get sick less. Because social relationship lessen the stress. 이것이 의견의 장점 부분에 가도록 배치.
8. 옥시토신 증가: high level.
9. The brain react to tweeting as it reacts to, a dinner conversation with good friend.
10. 트위터 결과: oxytosin levels spike 13.2%. same spike as groom in the wedding. stress hormones are getting down. "Our brain interpreted tweeting as if we were directly interacting with people we cared about or had empahy for." E-connection is processed in the brain like an in-person connection
11. 키워드 추가: social support.
